Week 13 Story: The Escaping Snake
There was once a young mother who adored her children. She had four children, two boys and two girls. They absolutely adored the outdoors. Each day, they would spend hours and hours out in the yard, running through the dirt and laughing with one another. They were not kids who enjoyed watching TV or playing nicely with toys. They wanted to be loud, dirty, moving, and in the sun. Always. This happened to work out perfectly for their family because they lived out in countryside. They were constantly surrounded by animals and nature, which made all of the kids very happy.
One day, the young mom came home from work with a very sad look on her face.
"What wrong, Mommy?" the kids asked, noticing she was not herself.
"I have to tell you guys some bad new," she started, hesitating as she saw their concerned faces. "We have to move away for my job. We have to move to an apartment in the city," she explained.
The kids did not say much. They were disappointed, but they did not want to upset their mother any further. She did everything for them, and they did not want to seem ungrateful for the life she had created for them.
When moving day came, all of the kids put on a brave face. But when they arrived at the apartment, their hearts sank. There was no yard. There was no nature. All that could be seen for miles were tall building and all that could be heard was the honking of horns. There was no dirt, there was nowhere to run, and there were no animals to play with. Their mother could see how upset they were and vowed to do something to make up for it.
One day after work, the young mom came home with a surprise. She brought home a large enclosure full of birds! They chirped away, creating the sounds of the outdoors. The enclosure reached almost to the ceiling, full of all different colors of birds and dirt and worms for the birds to eat. The kids were overjoyed! They had a little bit of nature in their own home!
"WHAT IS THAT?" one of the kids suddenly screamed, noticing something squirming in the dirt. At first the other children just thought it was a worm and that she was overreacting. But then they realized it was no worm at all. It was a snake! They all began to panic and scream. Seeing that her kids would not be okay with a snake living in their home, the young mother told her oldest sons to kill it.
"We could cut its head off," one son suggested. "Or we could beat it with a rock," he continued.
"We could chop it up," said the other son. "Or we could abandon it outside alone."
It was at this final suggestion that the snake began to squirm about, hissing and seeming to panic. The boys thought that must be the worst of all, because even the snake was scared! And with that, they trapped the snake in a small box and carried him out to street. They tossed him in the sewer and walked away, thinking that he would suffer alone. Little did they know, the sewer was the best place for a snake!
Hi Carly,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your story about the snake. Your plot and story progression are very clear and easy to follow. I have to say that if I was to find a snake in my home it would not have been so lucky to be released into the wild. I grew up in the country like the kids in the story and the realities of that life is snakes will kill your chickens! Luckily I have 3 brothers so I never had to do any snake-killing myself.
Hi Carly!
ReplyDeleteI really like your version of "How the Turtle Saved His Own Life". I liked how it was in third person, so you didn't know the snakes feelings until the very end. However, you did a good job portraying how the snake tricked the humans into releasing him. I also liked all the detail going into the build up. Great work!